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Dear Katie, Dear Tom,
Did you know I kept waiting at the station.
I kept all your tears? Did the train forget about me?
I remember all the times you couldn't cry, I started to remember the smell of your jacket,
and all the times I held you. how you held me together.
I remember how I cried inside, no strength left, You were the reason for my smile inside,
and I never let you see. but I never let you see.
Today, I wanted to let them out. It's starting to rain;
I wanted you to see me, The sky is in bloody hysterics here.
wherever you were. I can't stop it running down my cheeks.
It's started raining, You were my strength,
and I won't reach you in time. always in reach.
This is our rain, remember? I'm standing in our rain, warm in your jacket.
I know you'll be kept warm. Where have you gone?
Tom Katie
Did you know I kept waiting at the station.
I kept all your tears? Did the train forget about me?
I remember all the times you couldn't cry, I started to remember the smell of your jacket,
and all the times I held you. how you held me together.
I remember how I cried inside, no strength left, You were the reason for my smile inside,
and I never let you see. but I never let you see.
Today, I wanted to let them out. It's starting to rain;
I wanted you to see me, The sky is in bloody hysterics here.
wherever you were. I can't stop it running down my cheeks.
It's started raining, You were my strength,
and I won't reach you in time. always in reach.
This is our rain, remember? I'm standing in our rain, warm in your jacket.
I know you'll be kept warm. Where have you gone?
Tom Katie
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hi, i'm a critic from 
I'd like to apologize for the following short critique but I'm trying to catch up on my critiques. The concept you have here is interesting, even if it's been done before, you do it in a different way. It's supposed to be distracting, but because you keep everything here uniform, it's not. At the same time, I want to see what's going in both pieces and I lose some of the sincerity of the poem because of that. Again, it's something that you have to sacrifice there because then the poem wouldn't really work. You don't have a lot of concrete imagery here, but that's ok, because the poem is strong in other ways. The matching lines are great, again, keeping the uniformity firmly in place. What I mean by that is in one poem, the stanza has two lines but in the other poem, the same stanza has two lines. Great job, there's always things to improve but overall you wrote a good and unique, romantically tragic piece.
I'd like to apologize for the following short critique but I'm trying to catch up on my critiques. The concept you have here is interesting, even if it's been done before, you do it in a different way. It's supposed to be distracting, but because you keep everything here uniform, it's not. At the same time, I want to see what's going in both pieces and I lose some of the sincerity of the poem because of that. Again, it's something that you have to sacrifice there because then the poem wouldn't really work. You don't have a lot of concrete imagery here, but that's ok, because the poem is strong in other ways. The matching lines are great, again, keeping the uniformity firmly in place. What I mean by that is in one poem, the stanza has two lines but in the other poem, the same stanza has two lines. Great job, there's always things to improve but overall you wrote a good and unique, romantically tragic piece.